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Who wants to read my project?

Exclusive to your eyes only, this act, I just wrote :

Isau : button online.

A complex story line, running away from one another in the search of harmonous compassion, drilling in throughout the bottle of our own wisdom, editing it all out in space in between, acting lower then what it is drawaing upwards, in a confort zone, we linked up on each complex. A mirror detail in motion, set to deselective all orange levels, hidden complex. Inside a murderous dollhouse, we all know the same old run down saying .

"Save a stitch in nine."
no matter where it ended and have around,
we sad saluted towards a criminal effect, gathering up where it stand tall. This was not us, this was our android side, cradeling from within, a winter's own spell, acting astrophological spinning inside there, a complex cyborg knocking on otherside, right in front of us.
Not knowing if the additional heart, was ever programed within, a sorrowness burning up, as something snitched from theiveries,
on slaughter and knowing less then, how many idiots recall. It was a sad sorrowness, made up verisions and inside raves.

Without warning, each machine awoken to moutian top, sitting and drinking Earl Grey Tea, with honey in it, in awement of their own soul song "Mary Jane's Last Dance" By Tom Petty & Heartbreakers.
As they cradle the idea from within, a shogun appeared, waving his kaji's sign of number 51.
Asking in a sincere matter "Doth life of work, making over exhasted?"

"Doth indeed, we breath in everything from being small, a trout, to an elephant in a room. Human. Complex wars within their own mind. Will not hush over our thought."
The Shogun clancked his armor down on a plaeteau,staff placed carefully besides him, a bunny belt, wolves fur and helm, serious eyes and burst out laughing.
"You are a book, how did you wage war?"
"Not everything it seems where it is judge, doth not read a library of itself?" Venom uttered underneath his voice.

"A stronghold wearwolves howl once said 'Time is better within our own battle cry. It should of been butter to our sourdough.'"
"Intresting segment, I wish to continue, alas my voice is growing tired. Ah Rainbow.." She appeared, fluffed her hair at him, smiled, and scooped up isau from the ground.

"MMmmm... Love a man in armor."
 
Oh hello.
 

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@Milo Willamson, I've pointed out before the need to use a spell-checker, and also to use correct grammar. But from the following snippet...it doesn't look like you're doing either.

"Escaping our own witnessing in these small children, as they lay out of each,
covenionations behind another trouble, looking outwards and knoing how much it is, a strange
gahtering over, annoucing outwards and resounding there, it was a mania problem,
they knew it was ever escaping in these houses, a manical troubleing in these type writer, behind another murderous range, it felt more then a lower draw bridge."

I've only addressed the spelling errors [they're underlined]; the grammar is a whole other issue. Just the fact that that's one long, drawn-out paragraph is problematical.

Please know that I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, but beating around the bush won't accomplish anything. We need to know what our mistakes are in order to correct them. :)
 
MoodyBlues said:
@Milo Willamson, I've pointed out before the need to use a spell-checker, and also to use correct grammar. But from the following snippet...it doesn't look like you're doing either.

"Escaping our own witnessing in these small children, as they lay out of each,
covenionations behind another trouble, looking outwards and knoing how much it is, a strange
gahtering over, annoucing outwards and resounding there, it was a mania problem,
they knew it was ever escaping in these houses, a manical troubleing in these type writer, behind another murderous range, it felt more then a lower draw bridge."

I've only addressed the spelling errors [they're underlined]; the grammar is a whole other issue. Just the fact that that's one long, drawn-out paragraph is problematical.

Please know that I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, but beating around the bush won't accomplish anything. We need to know what our mistakes are in order to correct them. :)
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I'm reminded of something one of my middle school students wrote once. "I love my grammar and granddad". :thumbsupdroid:
 
MoodyBlues said:
@Milo Willamson, I've pointed out before the need to use a spell-checker, and also to use correct grammar. But from the following snippet...it doesn't look like you're doing either.

"Escaping our own witnessing in these small children, as they lay out of each,
covenionations behind another trouble, looking outwards and knoing how much it is, a strange
gahtering over, annoucing outwards and resounding there, it was a mania problem,
they knew it was ever escaping in these houses, a manical troubleing in these type writer, behind another murderous range, it felt more then a lower draw bridge."

I've only addressed the spelling errors [they're underlined]; the grammar is a whole other issue. Just the fact that that's one long, drawn-out paragraph is problematical.

Please know that I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, but beating around the bush won't accomplish anything. We need to know what our mistakes are in order to correct them. :)
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Thanks.
I type too fast a lot of times, and do not bother looking at the errors of my ways, I probably need spell checker on this machine.
 
Milo Willamson said:
Thanks.
I type too fast a lot of times, and do not bother looking at the errors of my ways, I probably need spell checker on this machine.
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If you're planning to publish your work at any time, you'd definitely need to get it proofread, and not just rely on a computer spelling and grammar checker.

I occasionally do proofreading myself, but really only as favours for some of my friends and former students.
 
mikedt said:
If you're planning to publish your work at any time, you'd definitely need to get it proofread, and not just rely on a computer spelling and grammar checker.
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Excellent point. Spell-checkers can't know if your, which is a valid word, is really supposed to be you're. Ditto for many other words.
I occasionally do proofreading myself, but really only as favours for some of my friends and former students.
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Same here, minus the former students part. :)
 
Milo Willamson said:
Thanks.
I type too fast a lot of times, and do not bother looking at the errors of my ways,
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I type at lightning speed--but I take a moment to proofread before submitting anything. That includes email, forum posts, letters, text messages, etc.--basically anything written. It's worth it to me.
I probably need spell checker on this machine.
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What are you using? I don't even use spell-checkers, yet they're everywhere! From the tiniest notes app on my phone, to the email client on my computers, to the browser I'm using right now [on my phone], they all have spell-check built in. I have to go out of my way to find a program that doesn't include it! :o
 
MoodyBlues said:
I type at lightning speed--but I take a moment to proofread before submitting anything. That includes email, forum posts, letters, text messages, etc.--basically anything written. It's worth it to me.

What are you using? I don't even use spell-checkers, yet they're everywhere! From the tiniest notes app on my phone, to the email client on my computers, to the browser I'm using right now [on my phone], they all have spell-check built in. I have to go out of my way to find a program that doesn't include it! :eek:
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Mostly word pad without spell checking :) Sometimes I will google the word :)
 
mikedt said:
If you're planning to publish your work at any time, you'd definitely need to get it proofread, and not just rely on a computer spelling and grammar checker.

I occasionally do proofreading myself, but really only as favours for some of my friends and former students.
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I could not though, but my girlfriend seem to love that idea :)
 
ISAU :Mister Casteby Conshell : turkey appluase.
Nearby a strike at a bowling alley way, lane six.
someone idiotic warmongor spilled his water all over the table.


Luckily we had a roll of paper towels to help it out, and rinse them in the sink, over time it dried up.

We had a team effort at bowling, our consciousness succor ,
leading score of 639 pins out of 700 possible pins, in sportsmanship handshaked the opposing team.


Trivium rumps we struggled with (i.e. having spotted oily lanes, bowling pins stuck in the gutters, bowling ball getting stucked inside ball return. Funny but true - munkee) we excelled by 50 pins over the next team . Hearing the crowd uproar for our team, we stand in obilivion, near sighted our excited for just a moment.

Nearly in the foresight spectulcal, in balanced perfect metaphor. Ten, and nine pins where still up, as the final team mate circled his arm, extened his bicep, curled down and hunch a little bit down, his eyes narrowed against the mark, shoes slid with the lane's wood, threw it down. Hit both pins.

As the moment is gone, flashbulbs went off. In that only frame of mind, they where so focused on the game itself..




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My latest one people. :)
 
Milo Willamson said:
More at http://staticfactories.blogspot.com
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My dear Milo... I tried to read your latest entry, but--yet again--it was so rife with errors, I couldn't finish it. We're talking grammar, spelling, every kind of writing error one can imagine.

I've suggested using a spell-checker, numerous times; I can't for the life of me figure out why you don't. Or do you use one...and just ignore its warnings? :thinking:

You're misspelling even common, basic words--layed, benifet, vaccum--and/or creating new ones--selfishes, fluxuations...

My best advice is a repeat of what I've said before: go back, entry by entry, and run them through a spell-checker. Then, going forward, use--and pay attention to its warnings--a spell-checker as you write.

But that will not solve the problems with grammar, and I honestly don't know what to suggest for that. Maybe a copy of the renowned The Elements of Style by Strunk and White, or Complete English Grammar Rules would help.

I don't mean to hurt your feelings. You've asked for feedback, and this is mine. :)
 
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MoodyBlues said:
My dear Milo... I tried to read your latest entry, but--yet again--it was so rife with errors, I couldn't finish it. We're talking grammar, spelling, every kind of writing error one can imagine.

I've suggested using a spell-checker, numerous times; I can't for the life of me figure out why you don't. Or do you use one...and just ignore its warnings? :thinking:

You're misspelling even common, basic words--layed, benifet, vaccum--and/or creating new ones--selfishes, fluxuations...

My best advice is a repeat of what I've said before: go back, entry by entry, and run them through a spell-checker. Then, going forward, use--and pay attention to its warnings--a spell-checker as you write.

But that will not solve the problems with grammar, and I honestly don't know what to suggest for that. Maybe a copy of the renowned The Elements of Style by Strunk and White, or Complete English Grammar Rules would help.

I don't mean to hurt your feelings. You've asked for feedback, and this mine. :)
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Thank you, I better double check it out and repost it with just that, maybe I was not thinking clearly on that day. :D
 
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