I liked the bit about the updating apps. That's surprisingly fast.
The only thing I would have left out is how you love Sense. There are a ton of people who love it, and a ton who don't. In my experience, if I'm reading a review and the reviewer says how much he loves Sense, Motoblur, or TouchWiz, I'll pass on because I don't think it will be fully objective.
Might have been good to say something like "If you love Sense, you will love this latest iteration of it even more, and if you don't, all of the 3rd party launchers work smoothly and without lag."
To me, everything else was excellent.
But, of course, just my opinion.